The soul keeper chapter 1:A picnic gone wrong!

I'm good and I don't wanna brag but I think that I captured the characters very good!!!
There once lived a little pink hedgehog on a peculiar planet called Mobious. Her name was Amy Rose, and her whole life was revolving around another hedgehog named Sonic. He could run faster than the speed of sound, hence the name 'Sonic'. She had a huge crush on him, and Sonic was aware of it, but Amy didn't know that he secretly liked her back. Since he always ran away from her, she always assumed the worst. But, he always saves her when she's in a jam, and one of the most major problems of her life was coming up soon... in fact, very soon.... but now, it's a sunny afternoon, and Amy was having a picnic with her best friend, Cream the rabbit! They were trying to find a good place to eat. Cheese, Cream's pet chao, was flying right next to the girls. "Isn't it a good day for a picnic, Amy?" Cream asked."It sure is, Cream!!!" Amy said in a friendly tone."Chao Chao!" Cheese said. "I think that Cheese is excited!" Cream translated."Here's a good spot!"Amy set down the checkered blanket and the wooden basket with all of the food that Cream helped Amy prepare stored inside. "Mmm, I'm starving!" Amy said, licking her lips. ZOOM! A red flash ran past Amy, Cream and Cheese."Oh my gosh!" Amy said. She knew who was here. Shadow the hedgehog, the ultimate life form. He kinda looked like a 'Goth version' of Sonic. After the recent death of his best friend, Maria, Shadow has sworn revenge on humanity, Earth, Mobious and everyone in it. Shadow stopped in front of them. He wasn't smiling. "What do you want?" Amy asked in a disgusted tone to Shadow. He didn't answer. He ran strait towards Cream and Cheese. "STOP!!!" Amy yelled as she got out her red and yellow piko piko hammer and dodged his attack. "Cream, go somewhere safe!" Amy yelled loudly. "But Amy..." "GO, NOW!" Amy screamed, trying her best not to sound mean nor pushy. Cream ran with Cheese not to find shelter...... but to find help......
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Sonic rested next to a tree, leaning on it's thick brown stump. Suddenly, Sonic heard yelling. It was faint, but loud enough to make out the words. "Sonic!!! Help!!!" It was Cream, running with Cheese as fast as she could. "Cream?! What's wrong?!" Sonic asked. Wasn't she supposed to be on a picnic with Amy? He didn't see Amy running with her.... "Shadow! He came back! Amy's fighting him right now!!!!" Cream said, scared. Sonic gasped. Shadow would surely be hard on Amy, he was even a challenge for a tough warrior like Sonic. Sometimes, he would even be too hard to beat.... "Okay! Go to Tails' workshop were it's safe!" Sonic instructed Cream and Cheese. They ran in the direction of where Tails' workshop was, and Sonic ran in the direction of where the picnic was being held.
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Shadow put up quite a fight . Amy was doing good against him, but not well. She had scratches and bruises from where she had been stabbed or hit. Shadow charged up to Amy when she was off guard. "EEEEEEEEEEEEEKKKKK!" She screamed as she fell down in the tall grass. Shadow, knife in hand, went up to her and he got in a position to stab her in the heart, thus killing her immediately. But then, he saw the young and beautiful face of Maria Robotnik, begging him"Please, Shadow! Love people! Befriend them for me.... help them, Shadow!" Gosh. He hated when his mind brought up Maria memories when he is about to do something either really good or really bad.All of a sudden, a blue flash rushed by and knocked Shadow over. "What... have you.... done?" Sonic asked in a horrified tone. "This does not concern you. Go away before you get hurt." Shadow picked up Amy, and a portal that was filled with black swirls opened up in front of him. Shadow ran in, and the portal closed after him."AAAMMMMMMMMMYYYYY!!!" Sonic screamed at the top of his lungs. "Okay, now for my next target!" Shadow thought to him self.